Innocently Depraved

[jepoj91]

Look forward to his updates
Wow. Awesome writing.

[oppaman]

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[MelanisticWolf]

Amazing sexciting story, please update us soon bro

[hwilliam]

Look forward to his updates. It has been a while since last update

[SAWgunner]

Bro, please continue…

[bayij]

“Hufff... Tommy... went... Out...” I replied, my voice straining as I struggled to take another step. Lifting weights is one thing. Lugging one up the stairs proved to be a whole different sport.

[SAWgunner]

Hey there,

I am a wannabe writer. I have always dreamt of writing my own opus like Bro Depraved has here. I really love like story. I’m obsessed with it! I realise Bro Depraved might have difficulty continuing the story, but there are so many story legs to explore. We could have:

The Origin Story

How did Tommy end up this way? Was his dad the Grandmaster who taught Tommy everything? Was Christine loaned to Tommy? How did Tommy lose control? What is Tommy’s bodycount really? How did he start with Alicia? Who else is in Tommy’s gang? What is the body count with Tommy’s gang? Who else is in “The Game”?

The Melissa POV story-arc

How did Tommy break and turn Melissa? When did it start? What was Melissa’s training like exactly? What is Melissa’s body count? How many other gang-bangs has the had? (Part 2 seems like this is not her first rodeo). How many other guys has she submitted to? How does her new lifestlye carry over into her worklife? Does she offer sweeteners? Does she submit to her bosses?

The Alicia POV story-arc

This area is not really fleshed out. Alicia’s journey as a submissive should mirror and contrast with Melissa’s story. How does Barry as a Dominant compare to Tommy as a Dom? They obviously have different temperaments.

The male gaze

Also, the female characters looks and figures should be fully fleshed out for the male gaze and tiltillate the audience regularly. What is their height? Weight? Bra sizes? How long is their hair? Are they fair or tanned? Are they thicc or got thigh gap? That sort of thing? To be fair, the guys should have a female gaze too.

Brian’s Revenge story

So far, there hasn’t been that true sense of jeopardy and dread that the Main Character faces (i.e. Barry) that can be considered netorare. I think the audience is waiting to see Brian have his revenge. Let Tommy and Barry lose Melissa for awhile. Let them fight and aruge, and then see how they win her back. Throw a spanner in the works.

Barry’s dad story

Another angle to explore is Barry’s dad. He’s definitely a beta male. Is he a cuck? Does he actually know everything that’s going on? (Like true healthy marriages should). Maybe Barry’s dad gets off on being a cuck? Maybe Barry’s dad and Tommy’s dad new each other from Pre-U? Maybe they swapped gf’s back then and Barry’s dad was originally with Christine and Tommy’s dad was with Melissa?

The Tommy vs Barry relationship story

The boys relationship is the crux of the story. Tommy should learn to trust Barry ane open up to him. The story should also see Barry grow in confidence as a Dominant under Tommy’s guidance.

The one-shot sidequel

We need a B-story going on while the Main Characters/Protqgonists are at play. These B-stories could be full fleshed out into like one-episode stories.

Means of evaluation

One area Bro Depraved has excelled are fully fleshed out characters. He illustrates their thoughts and feelings and justifications for this lifestyle. Please carry on.

More depraved please

One area I wish could be developed more are BDSM elements in the story. There should be more and they could develop in complexity. BSDM elements include:

Sex toys: Things like collars, leashes, nipple clamps, remote vibrators, etc

Sex positions: You can look up “BDSM sex positions”. Things like, crabtie, mating press, standing doggy. Or a doggy walk in a collar and leash. We could have Melissa greet Tommy at the door, face down ass up. Or cuffed to a stripper pole. Or slutwalk at Orchard Towers. The ideas are endless.

BDSM training: we could see how Melissa and Alicia go through their obedience training. Things like clothing control (controlling what Melissa and Alicia can wear), cum control (with the use of remote vibrators), public (but discreet) flashing, spanking, breast play/slapping/torture, nipple clamps and piercing. Also after care (how they “sayang” a submissive after a session) is important. Really, go as pervert as you can and live up to the story title! Heheh.

Slow burn
Lastly, Bro Depraved, this story works as a slow burn. Tease the audience and give them blue balls. Take your time, don’t rush it!

[takada]

Thanks for nice update.

[comchest]

Hope to read more.

[xucker]

Nice one bro SAWgunner!

[Depraved]

“Bruh! That was some wild shit!” Vincent gushed.

“Not bad right?” I replied, grinning.

Me and the boys had successfully retreated back to our own room. Vincent and Anthony were freshly showered. Derrick was currently showering in the bathroom while Raymond and I were waiting our turn. Excitable as ever, Vincent was still sporting a post-orgasmic glow on his face as he danced around the room, celebrating the loss of his virginity.

Meanwhile the gears in my head were grinding non-stop to come up with more entertaining scenarios for my dear ‘customers.’ As the saying goes, there is no rest for the wicked. While initially reluctant, I can hardly believe that I’m now fully into helping out my mum and Tommy’s play out their perversions. I’d be lying if I said I didn’t find it somewhat exciting. My own cock has been protesting in my pants for several hours from being denied any action. Haiz.

We were gonna be at this resort for four nights. I decided not to plan anything else for the rest the day. One event per day should be sufficient to keep my customers happy, I think.

So the boys and I showered and hung out in our hotel room until dinner time.

At around 6pm, my mother messaged me to ask if the boys wanted to go to dinner together. My dad wanted to try out the local seafood.

Of course the boys weren’t going to turn down a free meal. Especially not after they broke their bank accounts to become my mum’s clients. Also, I’m willing to bet they wanted to see my mum again.

So after some preperation, we headed out and met my parents at the reception lobby area. My dad wore white cotton shorts and a fresh polo shirt. Mom dressed in a knee-length abstract patterned sundress with long loose sleeves of a thin, see-through material. The dress didn’t allow her to bare her shoulders or back this time but the neckline borders risque, and showed some cleavage.

As expected, none of my friends could meet my mother, Melissa’s eyes. Mum on the other hand, proficiently acted none the wiser to the fact that she had just been pounded by all four young boys earlier in the afternoon. She couldn’t hide the elegant glow in her cheeks though.

We chatted a bit while we waited for a couple of taxis to pick us up from the hotel lobby. Mum pretty much broke the ice and managed to hold a conversation with the boys for a while. Upon seeing that my mum didn’t seem to have any memory of their deeds in the afternoon, the four of my friends relaxed abit and started goofing around with her as usual.

We taxied back to the village and had dinner at one of the seafood restaurants. After that we walked a bit by the seaside where a night market was being held nearby. Everybody was in free roam mode, but I mostly stuck with mum and dad.

Dad, being a photography nut, walked ahead of us, eager to secure some shots of the local night scene with his rather old-timey camera. The kind with with a massive lens like a short telescope.

Mum and I tailed him but stopped at the various stalls along the way to look at the local fare.

“So… I was thinking what to do for the guys tomorrow,” I said nonchalantly as we browsed the wares, “What are your plans with daddy?”

“Hmmm? No plans yet,” mum replied with a coy smile, “I think he really came here to relax. You know your father, he’s probably going to sit under an umbrella on the beach all day and listen to his audiobooks. If not, he probably wants to go sightseeing to take photos. What about you?”

“The guys and I will probably hit the beach first after breakfast before the sun gets too high. After that, dunno lah. Maybe snorkeling. Maybe kayaking.”

“Right after breakfast? You’ll get sunburned for sure.”

“Yeah, you’re probably right. What about Tommy’s tasks? You have any idea?”

Mum looked thoughtful for a minute. “Sex on the beach?” She asked coyly.

I scratched my head. “Siao ah, the beach so open. You gonna get caught and recorded.”

Mum chuckled. “Surely there are secluded spots here and there.”

“Yeah, maybe. Will have to go see first. Haiz. This is supposed to be my holiday. Why am I doing so much work?”

Mum grinned at me and nudged me with her elbow. “What are you talking about? You got paid what. Mummy is the one doing all the work without pay.”

“Erk… yeah you’re right.”

Mum then reached up and pulled on my ear affectionately. “You better buy mummy a present with the money when we get back home, hor?”

“Yes, mummy.”

“And don’t worry so much about Tommy’s tasks. If there is really no chance, I’ll just drop by your room and blow everyone. 20 mins and done.”

I chuckled.

We walked some more for a few minutes and mum suddenly turned to look at me with a coy smile lighting up her face. “Haha, Barry, I just remembered something.”

“Huh? What?”

“Your dad has started taking sleeping meds.”

“Huh, really? Since when?”

“Sometime last year while you were still overseas. He couldn’t sleep because of stress at work so he saw a specialist who prescribed him some aids.”

“And he brought it along for this trip?”

“Yes, I saw him pack it.”

“Reliable or not this medicine?”

“It’s quite effective. That one time, the neighbor’s burglar alarm went off right outside our house window. Shocked me awake, but your dad just slept through it.”

“Walau… So you want to plan something for night time, after daddy has gone to sleep?” I asked.

Mum rolled her eyes playfully and smiled. “How should I know? I’m not the mastermind. I’m just a silly hypnotized girl.”

At that moment we were interrupted by my father who excitedly gestured at some street performers up the street. “Melissa, get up there and let me get a few shots,” he said.

As mum trotted off to comply with dad’s request, someone bumped into my shoulder from behind. Glancing back, I saw it was Vincent who was giving me a hopeful look.

“What?” I asked.

“Err… Just wondering, got chance anot?” Vince asked, glancing meaningfully at my mum as she posed for my dad for a photo.

“Now?”

“Y-yeah… bro.”

“Dude, we’re in public!”

Vincent bashfully scratched the back of his head and chuckled awkwardly. “I-I’ve always got this fetish bruh, of molesting a chick in public.”

“Dude!”

“It’s just a fantasy lah! Of course I’d never do it in real life!” Vincent said.

“Right… So you want to do it to my mum now?”

“Well, I figured, since I’ve paid… Is there any way to make my fantasy come true?”

“Nah man. What if you get caught?”

“Won’t lah bro. We’ll be careful.”

“We?”

“Oh yeah,” Vincent replied, “Talked it over with the other guys. They’re super into it.”

I glanced past Vince shoulders to see the other three horny goblins huddled together near a stall, stealing glances at my mum.

“S-so I was thinking,” Vincent continued, “Is it possible to hypno your mum to be herself, but make her unwilling to call us out or make a scene while we umm….”

“Publicly molest her?”

“Er… yeah… haha. Like make her aware, but make her unable to stop us because of embarassment or whatever. Also make her get turned on by it. We wanna make her cum in public… if possible lah.”

“Jesus fucking christ, Vince.”

Vincent looked embarassed. “Too much?” He asked sheepishly.

“A bit. Yeah…”

“Aww… It’s okay then. It was just an idea. Hahaha.”

“I didn’t say it can’t be done.”

“Huh…? S-so…?”

“Be discreet. If you get caught by someone or make a scene. The whole deal is over. No refunds.”

Vincent gulped. “O-of course bro….”

Shaking my head in amazement, I marched over to my mother who was checking out the street performance with dad. I touched her on her arm and signaled her to come with me.

Mum and I pretended to check out another stall while I filled her in on Vincent’s fantasy. The more I talked, the more amused my beautiful mother looked.

“My goodness,” mum said, “The boys are really dirty-minded, aren’t they? And here I was thinking they were innocent virgins.”

I sighed. “Oh please. As teenage fantasies go, this much is considered quite tame liao. So are you up for it or what?”

Mum gave me a mischievious look and giggled. “Sounds fun. But we need to be careful. What if others see?”

“Yeah, yeah. I warned them to be extra careful.”

“Hehe… Okay then…”


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I glanced at my four friends across the street who were huddled together like a suspicious bunch, looking at me with their eyes wide with anticipation. Sighing, I gave them a thumbs up.

After that, I watched the four idiots comically try to nonchalantly approach my mum while we steadily progressed along the night market street.

The boys finally managed to surround my mum as she was checking out a souvenir stand. Meanwhile I hung around close by to keep an eye on the situation and also dad who was several meters away up the street.

Mum even acted pleasantly surprised to find the boys around her. “Oh hello boys,” she said warmly, “See anything you like?”

“Errr… no lah, just looking nia,” Anthony said as he sidled up to her left. Meanwhile, Vincent sandwiched her from the left. Raymond and Derrick closed in behind her, walling her off from the rest of the crowd.

“Oh… erm… take it easy, boys…” Mum said, looking uncomfortable, “Why are you… eh….”

Her voice immediately trailed off when Vincent and Anthony both placed a hand on her behind, over her dress.



“Ummm… g-guys?” Mum whispered, trying to wiggle away, but was stopped by Raymond and Derrick. “W-what are you boys doing?” She asked.

Damn, I can even sense the panic in her tone of voice. I had no idea mum had such a talent for acting.

“Just relax, auntie Melissa,” Vincent whispered, “It’s okay…”

“You’re so sexy, auntie…” Anthony whispered.

The both of the boys by my mum’s sides started squeezing her shapely ass over her skirt.

Mum gasped convincingly. “H-hey, st-stop joking around, guys” she whispered in reply.

“Shhhh… Don’t attract attention, auntie. Later people see how?” Anthony said excitedly.

“Yeah, it’s okay. We won’t hurt you. You’re just too beautiful and sexy. We can’t resist,” Vincent cooed.

Vincent moved his hand under mum’s sundress from behind and resumed caressing her ass directly. Moments later Anthony did the same. Raymond and Derrick did a pretty good job hiding the fact that the other two were each groping my mother’s fit, curvy asscheeks. Derrick couldn’t keep still however, and reached down to raise mum’s dress, revealing the action underneath. Mum was wearing simple white panties. I could see that Vince and Anthony had slipped their hands underneath the tight stretchy fabric and was directly squeezing her supple asscheeks.

“Please stop,” my mum whimpered. “Please, uncle is right there...”

“Shhh, it’s okay. He’s busy,” Raymond said as he watched the other two play with mum’s shapely, milky-white ass. After a few seconds, he couldn’t help but reach down to run his fingers up the back of her smooth thigh.

For the next several minutes, the boys freely groped my mother’s behind while she struggled to keep a straight face up front. It seemed a losing battle though as a deep flush had formed on her cheeks, betraying her excitement.

The stall’s vendor who was initially engaged with another customer, noticed my mum and the boys huddled at the end of his stall. He started to approach them.

Raymond noticed the vendor approaching. “Hey let’s go, guys,” he said.

The others got the hint They withdrew their hands immediately and pulled down the back of mum’s dress before ushering her away.

Mum let herself be guided up the street by the boys, looking appropriately stunned.

Amazingly, my father continued wandering up the market street, camera in hand, without so much of a backward glance to check on the welfare of his beautiful wife.

The four boys ushered my mother along while looking for another good spot to continue with their fun. Over the next half an hour or so, the gang proceeded to park mum at secluded corners of a fruit stall, a cake hawker, and a toy seller, where they continued to liberally grope her ass and thighs.

Mum’s panties seemed to be permanently pulled into her asscrack to fully reveal her luscious lily-white cheeks and the crotch of ther panties was visibly soaked. Throughout the ordeal, mum made multiple attempts to plead or weakly resist, but the boys easily hushed her into passivity each time.

It was pretty obvious the boys were growing uncontrollably hornier with each passing minute. Derrick even tried fingering mum’s pussy from behind, but seemed to have difficulty doing so. Probably due to inexperience. He gave up after a while.

Mum too was clearly super aroused. At several moments she seemed to break character and bit her lower lip and showing signs of pleasure.

But really, there was only so much they could do in the middle of a full fledged street market without giving themselves away. After a while, dad finally came back for mum to get her to pose for another photo. The boys reluctantly let her go and didn’t try groping mum again the rest of the evening.

While we were waiting for our taxis to take us back to the hotel, I pretended to act like I was hypnotizing mum to forget what the boys did to her in the market. Mum, being the great sport that she always is, acted accordingly and started vivaciously chatting with the boys again like nothing ever happened.

The guys kept looking at me like I’m some kind of god. Lol.

After returning to the hotel from the night market, my parents bade me and the boys goodnight. Mum even made a point to announce, “Sleep tight boys! I’m sure there will be lots more fun things for us to try tomorrow.”

Like jialat man, my dad was right there.

My four flabergasted friends glanced nervously from my mum to my dad and back to me.

Mum smiled innocently before taking off with dad to their suite.

“Damn man,” Derrick said, “Hey Barry, did you make your mum say that?”

“No lah, she probably meant to have fun with the resort activities and stuff,” I replied.

“But the way she said it…. It’s so… so….” Vincent said.

“Suggestive!” Anthony finished.

“I’m hard oledi,” Raymond declared.

“Walau, you guys,” I replied, “Stop being such horndogs. Let’s go back and rest. We got a long day tomorrow.”

The boys were in a good mood that night. We returned to our hotel room and watched TV and talked the night away. We went to bed around 11. Everyone was beat so we fell asleep without much trouble.